Ghere kahdi hai rasta mushkile chahu-or
Ham jiddi hai ki phir bhi bade ja rahe hai
Deti hai sabak har ek moud par zindagi
Beshrami dekho phir galtiya kiye ja rahe hai
Wo kahti hai chale jao mout ki aagosh me
Be-adab ham un suna kiye ja rahe hai
Jante hai har khel me milani hai mat hi
Naya dav phir bhi liye ja rahe hai
Sukha pada hai samunder palako ke bhitar
Kosish me baharne ki dard piye ja rahe hai
Ugalati hai jahrila shor ye khamoshiya
hotho ko siye bas jiye ja rahe hai
6 comments:
Pata nahi tujhe aaj kal Mout hi nazar kyon aati hai.
Par ha kabhi kabhi zindagi aisi harkaten karne lagti hai.
When you write in urdu then avoid pure hindi words like Vish and Zahar is jahrila itself. SO you can do like " Ugalti hai zahar ye khamoshiyan"
Give proper gape btween words like Be-adab, un suna and bahar aane.
Keep on writing in urdu also.
Happy blogging!!
@ shailesh
I will take care of typo moistakes next time and the word is bharane ko(to fill up)not Bahar aane ko so i wrote it like this.Hey thanx! i need ur suggesions for further urdu writing.
Oh! it is really tough to type in english such type of urdu words. And for urdu writing i will help you up to my best stand.
Baap re! Yahan tho urdu ke scholars baithe hai, main kya comment karu?
Just that its brilliantly written..
Keep it up!
really very good,
keep on writing, bhasha aur sudhar jayegi,
aur be a fighter like you have written
keep it up
Vicky
yaar its very scary. Let's move to some poems on nature and beauty. Write about a small baby and how it see the world , something like that yaar.Any way your poems or verses or whatever it is makes an impact.
Sree..
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